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sakabatou

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13. That isn't what happens within the story.

Sat Jul 29, 2023, 03:12 PM

Jul 2023

Maybe I should've added more detail.

This comes from a TV show. In the 17th season, the new girl becomes part of his new group for said season.

"She's smarter, more mature, more at peace, kinder, and fiercer. When she leaves never to return, the audience wants her back."

Kind of. Within the show, she's kind of new to the scene, trying to figure out what exactly she wants to do. She knows all the basics, of course, but she's unsure which niche she wants to enter.

The MC has changed over the course of the show, getting smarter, wiser, but with each season or two, there's a new challenge he needs to learn.

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[Trope Discussion help] First Girl After All [View all] sakabatou Jul 2023 OP

I might run this with a Chekhov's Gun.. Permanut Jul 2023 #1

As far as I know, there's no Chekov's Gun sakabatou Jul 2023 #4

To what degree is truth presented in the story that you have in mind ? Tetrachloride Jul 2023 #2

The story has been presented already, so I'm going to use a generic example sakabatou Jul 2023 #3

that happened to me. totally blanked out on a person Tetrachloride Jul 2023 #5

That's how it felt to me sakabatou Jul 2023 #6

Still pushing Chekhov's Gun.. Permanut Jul 2023 #7

There's no Chekhov's Gun to my knowledge in the actual show. sakabatou Jul 2023 #8

MC is floundering. loses sense of self LuvLoogie Jul 2023 #9

That sounds like something that'd happen in the first season as character establishment sakabatou Jul 2023 #10

Well you'd essentially be deconstructing MC LuvLoogie Jul 2023 #12

That isn't what happens within the story. sakabatou Jul 2023 #13

My own personal fix sakabatou Jul 2023 #11